Essay 1: Generally I believe that I talked about ideas that were related to Hallward and Epstein, but I don’t feel as though I have made any strong connections. Hallward and Epstein both discuss social change, like my essay did, but I didn’t identify any specifics from either person that could be more clearly connected, such as Hallward’s safe space radio or Epstein’s observations on community. My quotes tend to just show up in my writing with very little introduction: “In Hallward’s Ted Talk presentation, she brings up the topic of what the world has witnessed for the LGBTQ community and all of the changes in our laws for equal marriage rights; ‘What we know is that as gay and lesbian couples have been coming out of the closet for decades now, it becomes a larger political force.'” This is the most introduction any quote in my essay receives.
Essay 2: From my first to my final draft, I didn’t change much in terms of my analyses or elaborations of my ideas. However, from my first to second essay I took what each of the 3 experts and made it match my point much better. I provided better introductions for the quotes as well as quotes that work better within my essay. I’m still keeping my analyses of the quotes rather general; I need to figure out the most important part of the quote and exploit that, rather than its’ summary.
